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Saturday, September 13, 2003
I usually require a lot of time to write because i believe that a good article is 80percent thinking and 20percent of actual paper work. However this was an easier topic to write on because it is a part of all of us. It was exhausting and time consuming but it is finally over. I enjoy writing and i enjoyed this experience as it told me what i needed to concentrate on in order to improve my writing.
'You are your own biggest critic' goes a famous adage and it was ever so relevent in this case. I have never inspected my writing in my whole life. This one week has been fruitful.
Though i dont enjoy writing autobiographies i will make an exception in this case since it has helped me out.
It took me a lot of soul-searching, a sum-total of 8 hours of constant typing, and all by brain power, but I finall did it, Project 1... atleast I think I completed it. This writing assignment forced to take a closer look at every aspect of my life that related to writing, and boy, was that exhausting. I do however, need to improve on my project and I'm trying to spend as much time as possible doing that. I still need to organize and move things about a bit to get my paper to feel right. I hope that turns out well. See you this monday, have a good weekend.
Friday, September 12, 2003
I have never done writing or essays before. So I don’Äôt know what I should write on the first draft because I’Äôm usually lack of ideas. And I think that that is one of my weaknesses. At first, when I heard 3 pages, I’Äôm a little bit nervous. But after I heard doubled space, my nervous becomes less. On the first draft, after I write everything that I had in my mind for that time, I only got one page. I’Äôm shock because I really don’Äôt know what I should add to my paper. But I keep on trying and at last, I got 3 pages. But I don’Äôt think that it’Äôs already organized. So I think that my first draft is a little bit messed up. But after that, I feel that it isn’Äôt too difficult to write an essay if I have already got all the ideas that I want to write. From the conference, I knew what my mistakes are and where in the paragraph I should give some explanation. The writing lab also helps me a lot to find more ideas and to make my writing become more organize. And I think I still need to develop my ideas so that my writing becomes more interesting.
Writing this assignment caused me big trouble! Frankly, I thought it was hard because the topic was assigned; I didn't have much freedom. It took me hours to just start my paper; I wrote paragraphs upon paragraphs, and in a split second I deleted it all. I just didn't get the motivation to build up a good paper at first; the introductions were all forced out of me. Whenever I force my essays' introductions out of my mind, I would end of with something flawless. For me, the hard part was starting that good introduction. After hours of haggling around with the introduction, we reached consensus. The ideas then flowed and fitted perfectly into the paper making it very developed and intricate, and most of important of all, extemporaneous. That was when it all became easy, but after all the hours of starting a good introduction.
Dear students: you have until midnight on Friday to write about your writing process... remember that your entries are graded, for content and for length. Don't forget the homework for Monday: the final draft (in a folder with your two previous drafts), an electronic copy of the last draft sent to me, and the "Topic Brainstomrning" form (which you can download from the download page and fill out before coming to class). Have a good weekend and don't hesitate to ask if you have a question :)
I would call 'Letting go of Bart' as an autobiographical narrative because the author gives us her first person views on the incident as well as Bart. The piece is about the author and her views on the incident.
The piece starts out from present and then takes the reader back to their first meeting. This is a very effective method of writing.She thens constructs several incidents that happened between them all the time talking about Barts assets. She has also applied a very effective ending keeping the reader on the edge and in tune with Bart.
'Masks' describes what most people would have experienced in their childhood ; as either of the two personalities.
The use of specific brand names like 'nikes' as compared to 'cheap,treadless Scats' is very significant in the story, as it illustrates the only actual difference between the two girls. It examines their lives from a finiancial perspective.
I feel that the writer should have eliminated the last paragraph as it proves to be an anti-climax. Such a beautiful narrative should not have ended so abruptly.
The piece features a beautiful contrast between the two girls. The incidents are very significantly placed and each one adds up to the end. The author is trying to say that people generally only see the face-value and never bother to go in deeper to find out about a person. It could be thought of as a satire.
Writing this assignment has not been as difficult as I thought it would be. At first I had a hard time thinking of what I was going to write, and I spent lots of time thinking about it. I started to remember about all my years in school and was suddenly inmersed in lots of childhood memories, so I couldn't concentrate very well. I decided to brainstorm later. A couple of days after that I tried to focus and made a list of some things I wanted to develop in my writing. I had one idea for each paragraph and I would try to acomodate them in a certain order. When I actually started writing the project everything was suddenly easier than I thought it would be, my fingers kept typing and typing and my brain kept remembering of new things to write about. I actually decided to cut some of the stuff I had written because I thought it would be too long. I read it again and then eliminated some parts that weren't really necessary. After I turned in the first draft, I read it again and made some other changes, and now I feel a little more confident about the project.
At first I thought how I can write three pages because I never wrote a paper that long before but after adding more ideas my paper exceeds that length now. It was a kind of difficult at first draft because I have to think a lot about what I should write.
Surprisingly, after write final draft of Project 1 I feel more comfortable with writing. Now I know how to organize my ideas to fit with teacher’Äôs assignment. Writing is not so bad even I still spend a lot of time with it. Yesterday, I spent almost four hours to retype and revise my final draft but that was all right; I am patient. I found that writing lab was very helpful. It helps me to have more confidence when I know that my paper is in right direction and well- organized; if not I will change it. After conference I know what teacher really wants and what I need to write more in my paper and correct it properly. I feel a significant progress in writing a long paper.
Masks is a story about a girl who lives behind her mask. At first, the writer thought that the girl was wonderful. But in the end, the writer realizes that she has nothing besides her mask.
And I think I'll recommend to expand the last paragraph because we don't know what happen in the end.
In Letting Go of Bart, the writer explain about what she feels about Bart for example, she thinks that Bart is a gay but actually, he isn't. The one that she thinks that he is going to die but in the end, he still alive. I think this story can be called "autobiography narrative because she express her feelings in that story.
Thursday, September 11, 2003
Masks is a contrary essay. The writer described the differences between 2 girls. The writer started to describe 2 characters from their childhood until their adolescene. Both of them have different character. One who is insecured and depedent whereas the other one is secured and independent. One who always follow the fashion whereas the other one has to work to earn a pair of new shoes. Moreover, the author described about their differences about their appearance, upbringing and character. One who always take good care of her appearance, have a caring moter and always try to be cool among her peers. THe other one is totally the opposite. Moreover, a person who is popular and glamor in the public does not mean they have a beautiful character inside. They might be just air headed and mean. Kathy don't even know the basic of algebra and she ignored, used and judge a person because of her appearance. Lastly, the author is trying to tell us that don't judge a book by its cover and beauty is skin deep. Security and independace is something we should strive hard for not the approval among our peers.
Letting go of Bart is a sad and touching essay. The author described Bart; a kind, strong, determined person has to give up hope and life for a deadly disease--AIDS. The author also described the discrimination that Bart might face along his life. He didn't even dare to tell his best friend that he got AIDS. He probably had a crush with the author and he knows that it is impossible. He already contracted the HIV virus before he move in. After he move in, then only the virus became active. Anyway, after reading the essay one can tell that both of them are very kind and warmth hearted people. Birds of the same feather flocks together; Bart was the angle that the author prayed for. But at the end, Brad has to give way to the sickness he had.
Project 1 was the opportunity to discover what I need to improve my writing. The time was very convenient. It was kind of hard because as for a first graded paper it may not give a good impression about my writing. But I think it is grate because this course is to teach me how to write properly. I tried my best in this paper regarding the circumstances.
"MASKS" This story shows the kind of people that cares only about appearances. No one thought about the girl since she was a child. No one even tried to approach a relationship with her. Most of the people that the blond girl knew were superficial like her. That indicates that they are not worthy of the relationship of sensitive person. The good thing though that the girl found out that the blond one is really nothing with out her friends.
"LETTING GO OF BART" this is a sad story. How can a man, who seems to be so nice and smart, get him self in this trouble. But what happened had happened, and Iˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢m feeling really sorry for the lady that dedicated her life to help the people who have AIDS. Thus she lives a very depressing life; she struggles to have some pleasing bit of it. She loved Bart as a brother and accepted every thing about him. That era of he life can be conceder as an autobiography.
"Phantom Limb Pain" this story should the darkest feelings of that boy. How he even made a ceremony so he can overcome his rival. But this story also showed the good side of that boy because he was trying hard to become something better. And he felt guilty because he wanted something to happen to him. But in the end he realized how the other boy has such noble attitude and was happy that his place was filled.
’ÄúNO CATS IN AMENICA?’Äù That’Äôs a story that tills about how some people who immigrate to America feel at the beginning. The boy from Philippines had a shock when he went to school from the first day. He had some perspectives about America, but he didn’Äôt see all of it. Maybe the students in his school didn’Äôt meet a lot of international students before. But I think that all teenagers don’Äôt think right and find any thing different form them is wrong.
My writing is processing well. After I want to the writing lab on Wednesday, I found out so many errors I overlooked, and sentences which are not clear enough. I am currently working on them and hope the final outcome will be much better than the drafts. I would like to say that the writing lab is indeed pretty helpful, the assistants there are kind and their suggestions are useful.
"Masks" is a perfectly named article in my opinion. The author talks about how adorable, how attractive, and how people like her appearance. At the end, then, privides a huge turning point revealing that underlying the beautiful skin and body is a fragile, unconfident soul, which is like a "mask" and not worth being jealous of. Very precise and straight-forward. "Letting Go of Bart" on the other hand, the author used a backflash to present the story with a shocking scene, successfully making readers curious about how things went that way. In addition, the author also create a vivid portrait of the narrator by some impressive events. I like this well-written story.
"Masks" and "Letting go of Bart" are two narratives which illustrate how one can cover up his/her fears by showing different emotions or by putting on a different personality. In "Masks" Kathy had to have her friends around her, and her great sense of fashion to hide the fact that she was nothing without the two. She needed importance and social status to stay happy, we can see this when the narrator describes the scene in the library. "Letting go of Bart" also illustrates how a person can hide his actual feelings by showing some other emotion. In this case Bart who was a enthusiastic man with a good life, gets AIDs and instead of fearing the desease, which he probably does, Bart uses anger to cover up his fears. The narrator also points this out in the conclusion.
"Masks" is the story that we could somehow relate to the "The Phantom Limb Pain". They both tell the story about how a boy or a girl look up to someone else and admire them. However, in "Masks" the girl realizes that the girl she looked up to was not an authentic person, that she was in fact, wearing a mask. Many people use this to hide what they really are, they only care about what everyone is going to think about them and it doesn't matter to them if they aren't happy as long as everyone thinks she is happy. I feel sorry for people like this, that underestimate what they really are and can be in the future, they are always tied to the thoughts of others. At the end of the story the little girl learns that she is a better person than the other girl because she was independent and authentic, and that was the important thing after all.
The other story, "Letting Go of Bart", tells the story about the illness of Bart and how it affects the life of the narrator. The story begins with how the final day of Bart was soon to come, and expressed the narrators desire to say good bye in a proper way to her friend. Then we go back to when the two characters meet, the day Bart rented the apartment downstairs from her. Bart really gave life to that apartment with his singing and music and the enthusiasm he put into it. A relationship grew between them, and Bart was seen as a brother to the author. Then Bart begins with all the coughs and moves out of the apartment, not to see much of his friend for two years. "Letting Go of Bart" tells the story of how difficult it can be to let go of a loved one after the inevitable will happen, death.
"Masks" is a story about a person have bad impact on writer's life. This person is contrary with her about beauty that the most importan aspect a girl need in general. The girl is so perfect. The writer used detail description to bring up the beauty, the charming that she wishes for. But at the end of the story she found the beautiful in her own personality that was her confidence. Nobody perfect, everyone have their own beauty either inside or outside and they share equally importance; the important is to recognize it and please with it. Each person should find its own treasure and develope it. The last paragraph shouldn't leave out because it bring up the point of the writer; without it the story will not that good.
"Letting Go of Bard" is likely not a autobiography narrative. It is story that reflect writer sympathy about a person that she knew as a brother. He is a nice person and she didn't criticize what he had done to his life with understanding of a person working with AIDS victims. The theme of the story is it something that you can change so accept it. Madden sues a series of scences to create her portait of Bart, and the scence function very well to reveal Bart's character that Bart is a caring, talented, hard working person but bad thing still happen to him.
'No Cats in America' is beautfully narrated and descriptive story. The author uses scenes and incidents in order to convey purpose.
The significane of the story is symbolically conveyed. It is symbolically shown through a sequence of events, but the final moral is left up to the reader and is not explicit.
The author further creates significance by using specific words for food and party games in the Philippines.
The author both begins as well as ends the story with the Mousekewitz's song 'No cats in America'.
The 'Mask' is simple but complexed written story from a girl's view, and feeling to want to be pretty. She wanted to be look good like her friend from school, she wanted to be like her. However, at the end of the story, there was nothing behind the beauty she wanted.
The style of the writing was very interesting. She used well described word, and brought it to readers almost like a picture. It was fun to view a girls disire to be pretty.
Second story 'Letting Go of Bart' was a story from a certain person looked close to Bart. From the present view to story behind it. almost like a autobiography from other person. The writer brought readers sypathy of Bart by telling his story. It was interesting, but somehow it wasn't quite interesting story for me.
"Masks" is about masks! The writer states that explicitly in her narrative. What I find intriguing is the conclusion. It's simple, yet complex. The masked girl looked so perfect from the outside; she had a lot, but was so simple from the inside and had nothing. Clearly, her character and looks contrasted. The conclusion conveyed the same characteristics. It was short and simple like the girl's character, which makes it complex in meaning and effect, like the girl's looks. And for that, I believe it's an amazing conclusion!
As for "Letting go of Bart", I would have to agree with it being an autobiography. In spite of the narrator's negligence of herself, she alludes to the effect Bart had on her life, thus, qualifying this narrative as an autobiography. The emphasis on Bart was mainly in reply to rhetorical questions.
Both Phantom Limb Pain and No Cats In America? are narrative about someone lifes with different perspective.
In Phantom Limb Pain, Saknussemm leaves a lot unsaid and lets the readers to think on their own to fill in the gaps. Phantom Limb Pain talks about a guy who first wants to be the number one. And because his rival is severely injured, he takes that chance to beat his rival. Finally, he manages to beat his rival. But in the end, he still thinks that his rival is still ahead of him because being a leader doesn't always be intrepreted as being number one. There are also some other aspects that makes someone to be number one.
In No Cats In America, Jose wants the readers to really understand the story in his writing. He lets the readers to infer his essays from the details he gives in the story. No Cats In America talks about a guy who first dreaming about living in America. But when he comes to America and study there, he hated to be there. Actually, he doesn't hate to be there but he hates his background.
For me, both of the stories are good but I'd prefer No Cats In America because the writer gives details to his story. But we won't know what is going to happen next.
Wednesday, September 10, 2003
I like "Phantom Limb Pain" for the reaon that it reveals a realistic circumstance that happens to most people. Children usually grow up looking up to a hero that he or she wants to become, whether a parent, a teacher, or a famous guy. In the story, the author was given a chance to replace his idol while the terrible accident took place, and he done that successfully. However, deep in his heart, he found himself not comfortable because he beats the guy who he had been admired more years, who he always wanted to reach. He didn't feel the sense of accomplishment until Miller finally gave him a friendly expression. I like the way the author organized the story, the climax he made, and the happy ending. On the other hand, I don't like "No Cats in America" as much because I think the author didn't seem like he finish telling the complete story. He first provide a background, then how he got a chance to finally move to US, and turned into embarassment. In my opinion, he should be less detailed in the background informations, and tell us what happened after he "hate being Philipino."
'Phantom Limb Pain' leaves a lot unsaid. It has no explicit narrative and fails to extrapolate on various issues leaving the reader to fill in the gaps. The story is none too dramatic and offers a poor climax. The story also jumps very suddenly from time to time.
However the story offers revelation. It's about how people assume so much about other people, without really knowing them. It's about their attitudes and how people should stop being so insular and parochial.
The story also goes on to recognise a leader; in every sense of the word.
The story MASKS talks all about how important physical appearance is or is not. At first the author describes the feeling of a girl when she meets another girl who looks much more beautiful than her. He goes on to explain how the girl develops a feeling of inferiority complex and keeps away from the rest of the crowd. She finally comes to realise the fact that physical importance is not all that important . she realises the truth that the other girl depended so much on her looks and what people had for her but then she,on the other hand, was independent in her own sense. The title of the story is ver apt. It shows how physical appearance is just like a mask.
The story Letting go of Bard talks of characters of people rather than their physical appearances.Sheila Madden through her story tells her readers how she felt for her friend who was going to die. She paints a potrait of Bart. She describes how ,though not very close to each other,they felt for each other.
Phantom limb pain and No cats in America talk about how people feel in two different kinds of situation. Though both of them talk about different people, both seem to have the same kind of theme wherein the characters long to do something and then realize what they have done is wrong in the end.
Phantom Limb Pain talks of a normal person who envies a guy who is better than him. It furthur goes on to say how the author feels about the person at first and at the end of the story. He realizes the fact that leadership means more than just being a champion in sports. The author throws light on the fact that a leader is a leader in every sense of the word.
In "No cats in America" Jose talks about a girl who has been longing to live in the United States.Before comming to the United States she is impressed at the kind of life and oppertunities in the united states. She comes to the US only to find that it offers just more than good life and oppertunities - racial discrimination. She looses her self confidence and originality ,when she enters school and is being mocked at.I disagree with Hansheung ,for she was always happy with living in Philippines. Its just that she expected better life in the US. the author goes on to say as to how people like her begin to hate themselves for what they are for the sake of people around them. Finally Jose brings to light the fact that there are two sides to a coin - not everything is good about something.
Both these narratives, "Phantom Limb Pain" and "No Cats in America" were experinces faced by two different people. In my opinion Saknussemm describes his experience in less detail, not because he fell short of words it was because he had built up his story in the beggining. He was shown striving to beat his neighbour at football, and how he achieved his goal when Millers arm was amputated. Miller showed no anger towards him and proved to be a bigger person than Saknussemm had imagined him to be. What Saknussemm was trying to portray to the reader was how he grew from the experience, so digressing from his focus by describing the accident in full detail and describing how Miller was struggling with the fence would force the reader to loose focus on the main point in the paper. On the other hand Jose in his narrative used a lot of detail as he wanted the reader to have a clear idea about his life in the Phillipines before he moved to the States. This was important as he was creating a contrast between how he felt in both countries. How he loved the food in the Phillipines and in America he was embaressed by the food and threw it away every lunch. Writing his experience in detail would help the reader understand the difference in the way he lived in the Phillipines and in America
Phantom Limb painˆ¢’Ǩ’Äùthe author not only feels that the phantom is haunting him but also the pain he feels deep inside for Miller. He blamed himself for Millerˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢s lost. He is jealous over Millerˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢s success. There maybe something that he did to provoke Miller for stealing his brotherˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢s bike. The author always thinks that Miller was a threat to his life. The author was a mean person. He doesnˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢t like to be second in the neighborhood. He is trying his best to be number one. The author used the word mythic kid which means he is not real. It was just a myth that Miller ever existed. The author wasnˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢t even bothered that Miller was injured. The only thing that he writes about Millerˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢s room was the old celebrity poster, which is something not very cool to havce during their time. He wasnˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢t even concerned about his injuries. At the end of the story, the author initiates to help Miller over a fence. The words that Miller told him make him realize his mistake in life. He has a lot to learn from Miller.
No cats in Americaˆ¢’Ǩ’ÄùI think that the writer already had some problems when he lives in Philippines. He was happy but yet he feels that he can escape to a better placeˆ¢’Ǩ’ÄùAmerica is a free country. Eventhough, they had good times in Philippines, the author still feels something missing in life. If not why would he have a mixed feeling when his dad told him that he got a job in California. He should be excited.
The essays proceed to the level that the author not being able to be himself in a country he thought as a land of promises and equality. He is frustrated and furious over peopleˆ¢’Ǩ’Ñ¢s discrimination about him. He was punished for being himself as if he was punished before. He released his anger at his parents. At the end, he feels that he does not want to dissapoint his family but he is not happy. Finally, he break down in tears realizing that it is not his fault. People who judge him should be the ones to be blamed.
"Masks" is about a girl who experiences envy and jealousy and then, discovers herself for who she truly is. The difference between the narrator and Kathy is very clearly depicted, and the narrator is able to describe Kathy's flaws and her advantage over Kathy very well in the last paragraph of the story, where we realize who the better girl truly is.
In "letting go of Bart", Sheila Madden paints an effective picture of the feelings and emotions of a person who's about to lose a dear friend. The story has the air of an autobiography, because Madden describes her experience with Bart and her emotions with respect to that experience. Madden deftly creates an atmosphere of tension by starting with a description of Bart in intensive care, and then telling her story of how they met and became friends, and she brings resolution to the story by saying she's wiling to let him go.
The Phantom Limb Pain is a story about how most of the kids feel. During the early stages of your life you are always looking up to other people you admire and very often try to be like them. This story teaches us how we should not be jelous of other people and we need to make an effort to improve ourselves every day. Another very valuable lesson that we can see in this story is how we should not let pride get into us. Nobody is perfect and we should always accept help when we neen it.
The second story dealt with other issues such as ethnic discrimination and how some things are not what they seem. When I was a kid I also saw "An American Tail" and used to think that in order to be a better person someone should move to America. I guess this movie was just one of hundreds of ways the media tries to manipulate our way of thinking, making us believe that America is the land of opportunities bla,bla, bla... Well of course it is a more developed country and it has better techonology than most of the other countries, but it also has its own "cats". Like for example discrimination between different etnies. This is a major issue that some people think is extinct, but it isn't. However I think we should all be proud of our identity and not let other people make you think you are worth less just because you were born somewhere else or have a different skin color...
I guess I found 'No cats in America' and 'Phantom Limb Pain' intriguing. Both stories had an element of suprise and an interesting ending. I found 'No cats in America' particularly interesting, in that the author realizes that even the best places have their flaws and drawbacks. In 'No cats in America' , thanks to Jose's detailed and colorful writing, I found myself experiencing with him his life both in the Phillipines and in America. I think Jose had any audience in mind, because his was a story of innocence lost. I expecially feel, however that he might be aiming specifically at filipino audiences as well, because of all the references to filipino food, etc.
Saknussem on the other hand, had a somewhat uplifting tale of discovering his strengths and finding Miller King's. It is interesting to observe Saknussem as he transforms himself from envious wanna-be to football star. It is also interesting to observe his transiton when it comes to his opinions and feelings about Miller King.
After reading ’ÄòNo Cats In America?’Äô and ’ÄòPhantom Limb Pain’Äô:
I really enjoyed reading both of them, even though their writing style was different. Saknussemm wrote his essay flowed. I think he did that on purpose to get more interest from the readers. For example, he did not talk much about his haunted dream about keeping the mangled limb in vodka under his bed. However, if the reader reads his writing in Saknussemm’Äôs view reader can understand his feeling with out directly hear from him. I guess most of boys can understand what Saknussemm wants to say, and sympathize with him, but with out detailed description, may be many of female readers won’Äôt understand and won’Äôt find much interest about his paper than men.
Compared to Sakussemm’Äôs paper, Jose gave much more detailed picture to readers. Well described feelings and the scenes made me feel like I am the one who experienced the humiliation. I had very similar experience like Jose when I first moved to America. I found out the school life is very different from what I expected to be by watching American movies in Korea. I would say Jose’Äôs paper aimed to those readers who had similar experiences or also it can be interesting paper to those who are not. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading both of the essays.
I read "No cats in America" last week and I specially liked this autobiography. The title at first made me curious that why he said that way. It was easy to understand his theme because he explained what does "no cat in America means" according to him at the first paragraph. He conveyed his feeling successfully. He used many scenes and detail to lead the readers. The story was well- organized. Jose describe the differences between his life back home and in California by retelling the great parties his family usually had. That made we think life here in America is lonely because he and his family did not know many people in California. Jose was very creative by giving many interesting details. The climatic event was his mom had a private dicussion at his school and his classmate laughed at her accent and that the most humiliated thing to have, een more than bad food or strange accent.
Saknussemm tried to describe his effort in competing with Miller King. Although they only lived about 200 feet away but he'd never been inside Miller house before. This detail helped us know that they were not getting along because they were competitor. The accident happened to Miller brought them closer and more understanding. This narrative didn't have much interesting details like the other and his feeling didn't covey as successful as the other. Loc.
Tuesday, September 09, 2003
Writing can range from simple and direct to complicated and subtle. This is the first sentence in my Writer's autobiography. It summarizes a major point behind the analysis of Jose's and Saknussemm's essays. These two autobiographical papers differed in style. Jose's was detailed, and needless to say, Saknussemm's was not detailed at all. Frankly, I do not think that one style is better than the other. It really depends on the purpose of your essay; the most convenient way to reach your purpose is the best. Jose wrote a detailed description of his family's parties back in the Philippines using Filipino words for the types of food. Although we would not understand what types of foods they were, the served his essay pretty well. One reason why he has done that is to state the difference between his life back home and in California explicitly! If he had just mentioned how he loved the Philippines and how it was different; and then described his first lunch at the School in California, the reader's would not be able to observe a huge difference between the life he had back home and the one he had in California. This however, would not support his conclusion sufficiently; cats would not exist in America. Saknussemm's didn't mention why he felt some responsibility for Miller's accident. Why? He had mentioned earlier in his essay that he performed a ceremony at the site of his and Miller's fight prior to Miller's accident in two days. The audience therefore, had enough background to understand such claims of responsibility that Saknussemm had. He need not write more to serve his purpose so why should he? The main purpose both writers' had in common was to share their feelings with the reader. As long as there was sufficient background for the reader to understand their intricate feelings, they needed not write more details. In conclusion, Jose added more details in response to the rhetorical questions, while Saknussemm needed fewer details to answer the rhetorical questions. They both served their purposes in the most convenient ways they had.
hey everyone, this is Danish. I am from Pakistan, and im a sophmore at Purdue. I am planning on majoring in general management through Kranert (School of Management). I love to play sports, ive been playing cricket since i was old enough to join a cricket club. I wish you all good luck with your classes and hope you all will enjoy your experiences at Purdue.
